Book Excerpt (and I'm back!)

Well, I was hoping to schedule this in the middle of our trip. But unfortunately I forgot to before we left, and then while we were there my laptop didn't have internet connection.

So, vacation was very fun. We stayed at my grandparents house, which is by the beach. The water was actually on the warm side, which is very unusual. Another unusual thing...no sunburn for me! Wow! This may be because I put sunscreen on, like, every twenty minutes. =)

Did anyone else watch the US--Slovenia soccer game? For everyone who didn't, US won 3-2. However, your local newspaper may say that it was a *tie*, 2-2. This was because the ref kept on making the STUPIDEST calls EVER! Our last goal, which would have won us the game, was cancelled for no evident reason. Grrrrr...but anyway, we won, even if the ref doesn't say so. Now lets move on before I get very mad...

Here is the excerpt from my NaNoWriNo book (still lacking a title). Please, PLEASE comment and tell me what you think!
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It was not quite the middle of the night. Angela, Skye, Elizabeth, and Thea had all taken the bed to sleep in, and Abriel insisted he was comfortable on the floor. Elizabeth, however, couldn’t get to sleep. The mattress was itchy, and someone in another room was snoring thunderously.

Restlessly, she softly slid out of bed, succeeding in not rousing the other girls. They slept peacefully on as Elizabeth tiptoed to the window.

The silver moon shone down from the sky with a glowing, pure light, illuminating the city of Glenchin in a pale aura of light. There was no one down below in the streets, and (other then the man snoring) all was quiet.

Then Elizabeth saw a movement in the dark streets. It was only a small one, but it managed to catch the very corner of her eye. What was that, down below in the street? Whatever it was, it was moving toward the tavern door.

She gasped. At first, it had been hard to recognize in the shadows, but now she knew exactly what the dark thing was—an Eruik Cariol.

And now it was not alone. Another Eruik Cariol joined it, and then another. Soon, five had gathered at the tavern door.

Five is one for each of us, Elizabeth noticed. It was odd that she even noticed that in a moment of terror, but she did. Was this planned?

Then she realized what she must do. Tremblingly, she bent over the prophet, who was stretched out on the floor appearing fast asleep.

“Wake up! Wake up!” she hissed, shaking Abriel. “Hurry, will you?” The Eruik Carol were most likely in the tavern by now.

Abriel’s eyes slowly opened. “What?” he groaned.

“Eruik Cariol are in the tavern!” Elizabeth snapped at him. “Get up and get a move on!”

Standing quickly, she aroused Angela, Thea, and Skye with a silent shake. Then she turned back to Abriel. “How are we supposed to get out of here?”

It was then that Elizabeth heard the soft but audible step on the tavern stairs. Everyone else heard it, too. It was like the warning tick of a clock, telling them that their time was running out all too quickly.
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Enjoy!

Izori